Even more than the two unnecessary passives that follow, it's the introductory phrase that floors me: "With the idea that instead of ..."There was no coming back from that. I overhauled the whole sentence, making it something like:
Even more than the two unnecessary passives that follow, it's the introductory phrase that floors me: "With the idea that instead of ..."There was no coming back from that. I overhauled the whole sentence, making it something like: